This week we have used a picture as motivation for our writing. We had a story starter and then we had to carry on the story. What I like about my writing is the capital letters and full stops that I used.
I need to improve on using only one space instead of 2. We also made a google draw showing the things that we would take with us in on the balloon.
Bang! Bang! I got up and I packed my lunch. I put in Doritos chips, milk and a torchlight. I took Tyrell and Joel with me as my crew. When we were in the shiny, fluffy clouds, I almost got cloud sick. I was up high. We had to go around the whole world to Kerikeri and back. I was afraid of heights. I was too high up in the sky. I wanted to get all the money but I didn't win so the winning crew shared the money with me. We all bought something. The other crew was nice to me and my crew.
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